Show, Don't Tell!

A writer's words need to paint a picture or create a movie in the mind of the reader. He or she will see what's happening, hear the words, and feel the sensations described by the writer. It's easy to tell an audience what happened. But it takes more thoughtful reflection to carefully select verbs, metaphors, similes, sensory details, descriptions or feelings to show a first hand account of an event.
Task: Write a paragraph (Similar to "Freedom") that shows, rather than tells. Give it an interesting title. Link it to your name. Offer feedback and constructive criticism to your peers.
Tips:
1) Use images that appeal to the five senses.
2) Describe the person's actions or appearance, instead of saying what feeling he or she has. Let the EMOTION show!
3) Describe a specific setting.
4) Select strong, active verbs that help paint a picture in the reader's mind.
5) Include actual thoughts or dialog when you can.
6) Read your writing to a friend and ask, "Can you find at least four places where my writing is showing this scene to the reader?"
7) Use similes or metaphors wherever possible to enhance imagery.


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